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Floydian Trip
PostPosted: Mon Dec 14, 2009 3:16 am  Reply with quote



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Had a long ride back home tonight and left the radio off so I thought of this....

Withered

I've got a life sentence
No chance for parole
I have no bars around me
Nor a jailer to lock the door

I have no intention of leaving
Because this has become my home
Regularly scheduled beatings
And isolation to keep me down

I'm withering away in here
With no place to go
I'd like to put an end to it
But just need a little help

I'm out of God's reach now
And have to face this alone
I want to go back to the womb
And start anew

Not even young eyes looking up at me
Can shake me from this malaise
I dont deserve to be here
Just start digging that grave

I'm withering away in here
With no place to go
I'd like to put an end to it
But just need a little help


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arandomthought
PostPosted: Mon Dec 14, 2009 8:59 am  Reply with quote



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I know that feeling perfectly right now, and really like the lyrics. Any particular tune to put it to?
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Floydian Trip
PostPosted: Mon Dec 14, 2009 12:50 pm  Reply with quote



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You inspired me to think it up. No tune comes to mind I'd need Steven WIlson for that.
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Floydian Trip
PostPosted: Mon Dec 14, 2009 4:21 pm  Reply with quote



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I don't think it's actually a good song. My gf thinks it's dark, depressing and evil. I was just driving and the words all came to me. Kept me from thinking about the really dark stuff. Anyway I didn't work on it at all or change anything from the way it came to mind except that it was longer but I left some verses out that could be another song.
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arandomthought
PostPosted: Tue Dec 15, 2009 6:31 pm  Reply with quote



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Dark is ok. Some of the older stuff I wrote is dark as hell. I put new songs up if you want to check them out.
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Floydian Trip
PostPosted: Tue Dec 15, 2009 6:43 pm  Reply with quote



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arandomthought wrote:
Dark is ok. Some of the older stuff I wrote is dark as hell. I put new songs up if you want to check them out.


I have been they're good. Music isn't my forte. I think because I hold it in higher regard than any other medium. I may not have the best taste in music but whatever. I try to be more open minded about it than anything else.
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arandomthought
PostPosted: Wed Dec 16, 2009 5:22 am  Reply with quote



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Well, Give critiscism. I mean yours is short. I suggest trying to come up with a tune for it.
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